Out of Reach

[TheGreatDivide]

Oh these thorns in my side
How you keep me from seeking relief
I'm trying to find my reason to live
often wondering is this the end?


How much more do I have to sacrafice
Cause I'm nearing the edge
About to take my last breath
Fir the distance to my dreams
seems out of reach


Swarming like a shadow
Keeping my head held high
Hiding the doubt that burns inside


When I'm all alone
As I come face to face with myself
I choose to win
I choose to live.

[TrulyAmazing]

Oh these thorns in my side how you keep me from seeking relief , im trying to find my reason to live often wandering is this the end how much more do i have to sarcafice Great Job Also A Glimpse Of A Great Visual There Going As Well im reading from too that 2 prespectives which is hard because im trying because im not looking away from either reasons :) But Very Well Written Indeed What You Tried To Capture Here As A Poet Perfect as one

[nagpo]

It was written well. But most of the lines were taken directly from creed songs. I know you don't have a problem with that. But originality will help you explain what you're trying to say better. Those words will be truer to your heart and be yours, not creeds. Originality is the readers key to your soul.

Im not saying my stuff is 100% original. A lot of my work is inspired by various lyricists. But I've written enough to put an original spin on it, to make it my own. A lot of my earlier works were inspired by creed also.

I'd say keep at it. Try to use different lines/words to express yourself maybe. Practice. I hope you dont get angry at my post, just trying to help;)

[George Brasil]

DOn't know what you tried to make, but I agree it seems like a song you made using Creed lines. Don't know if it is your intention though.

[TheGreatDivide]

I've done alot of thinking and I wasn't trying to write a creed song by any means, thats just how I wrote it. Those are the words that really expressed my feelings and I can't help that Creed uses the same lines. With that out of the way, i've decided no more poems from me.

[TrulyAmazing]

I've done alot of thinking and I wasn't trying to write a creed song by any means, thats just how I wrote it. Those are the words that really expressed my feelings and I can't help that Creed uses the same lines. With that out of the way, i've decided no more poems from me.
Ya,alls We,ve Got A Lot Of Poets Here And Good Ones Too 95 % percent all influnced by creed I encourage ya to Wrting